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Blind by ~unheard-voice:iconunheard-voice:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional


They say the words you want to hear,
And though you know the truth inside,
With whispered lies to soothe your fear,
The truth seems easier to hide.

They show you what you want to see,
And blindly you believe it's true,
Not seeing it could never be,
Until they end up hurting you.

Professing love they do not feel,
You never see until the end,
None of their words were ever real,
But lies on which they still depend.

Now as the pain opens your eyes,
At last you see through their disguise.
©2004-2009 ~unheard-voice
:iconunheard-voice:

Author's Comments

i see too many people going for complete creeps, only to end up getting hurt when they find out they were actually just using them. but people only see what they want to see.

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~burnyouroleander Jan 9, 2004, 12:15:48 PM
'The truth seems easier to hide' <3 that line.
short and bitterlysweet.
well done.
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=Sweetheart-Hikari Jan 9, 2004, 12:27:21 PM
:clap: Well done..I really like the last two lines :D

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~Caboose: I don't want to be dead, I want to be alive! ... or a cowboy!~
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~DoveEyes Jan 9, 2004, 2:57:52 PM
This is a truly sad and touching piece, because it is so true. I love how you put this in a sonnet format, but used iambic tetrameter.... that's like one of my poems I wrote recently - I think it was "Between Two Worlds." The structure fits well for the subject manner and the words complement the feelings well. I love this.

You might wanna fix the "prophecing" and change it to "professing"... but that's the only thing I can think of that would make this a better poem. :)

:hug:
:rose:
:icondemonictoaster:
~demonictoaster Jan 9, 2004, 3:33:56 PM
... feels almost like you wrote this for me ...

[sighs]

I wish it wasn't that way, though. But at least I know better now...

:hugs: thank you for writing this.

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"When you're dead, you just disappear..."
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~princess-punk Jan 10, 2004, 12:59:39 AM
so true.... nice poem :hug: very nice talk to you later

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I'm so confused... wait, maybe I'm not!
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~thesmileserase Jan 10, 2004, 6:07:57 AM
what is sad about this poem, is that its soooo true. people do see only what they want to see :(
i like the transition from the person not seeing, to seeing the truth...its so sad but great writing. i love how ur poems can reach out to so many people, i know i can relate! :clap:

bethany :floating:

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"Now I'm walking again to the beat of a drum
And I'm counting the steps to the door of your heart."

- Crowded House
:iconthecorr:
~thecorr Jan 10, 2004, 8:55:33 PM
so many will buy into anything, for "love" , something we all need, seek after. you've expressed how we blind ourselves and accept false love so willingly...im so glad you've gotten past your writers block...your rhyming amazes me...it's always so well done

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We're rotten fruit
We're damaged goods
What the hell we've got nothing more to lose
One burst and we will probably crumble
We're backdrifters
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~perigryn Jan 11, 2004, 7:59:26 AM
Very nice work. I especially like this line:
"They show you what you want to see,
And blindly you believe it's true"
Due to the fact I can erlate to it most. Again, good stuff as usual bud.

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Just Greg, thanks.
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~luckieenumber13 Jan 11, 2004, 8:37:57 PM
very nice, loved it

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I have the attention span of....ooo a dime!!!!

If you're smoking, you'd better be on fire.
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