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Break me by ~unheard-voice:iconunheard-voice:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Dark


Grant me the pain,
I long to feel,
And fill the void,
That will not heal.
Drive the dagger,
Into my heart,
Then twist the blade,
Tear me apart.
Break this body,
Torment my soul,
With agony,
Beyond control.
Set me on fire,
Burn me with hate,
Abandon me,
Before my fate.
©2003-2009 ~unheard-voice
:iconunheard-voice:

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break my heart, so i know that its there...

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~trillian- Sep 10, 2003, 4:43:44 PM
Wow I got the first comment?!?!? HOw awesome. Another awesome poem Jere. But I don't want to hurt you. YOu're too nice a guy to hurt.

--
"It must be a Thursday, I could never get the hang of Thursdays..." -Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy
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~thecorr Sep 10, 2003, 4:50:05 PM
so much emotion...i nearly cried. you handle words so well...expressing the overflow of your heart. wonderful job Jeremy..

--
We're rotten fruit
We're damaged goods
What the hell we've got nothing more to lose
One burst and we will probably crumble
We're backdrifters
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~vampyrezraven Sep 10, 2003, 5:04:19 PM
when have i ever not related/ not liked your poetry.?seriously.. this is AMAZING more so than usual. good job...you!!!! (i dont know your name)

--
tears fall forever from a broken heart



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~unheard-voice Sep 10, 2003, 5:10:44 PM
im glad you like the poem, im sad you can relate, and the names jeremy, but you can just call me freak

--
The soul: "when it breathes through [man's] intellect, it is genius; when it breathes through his will, it is virtue; when it flows through his affection, it is love."
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~purpleblobofgoo Sep 10, 2003, 5:19:51 PM
This is amazing. You are such a great writer.

52 words of pain
settling into the
depths of my brain.
A poem where I feel
that I can relate,
My mind drifts
in and out of hate.
Hatred of life,
hatred of love.
Hatred for anything
living with blood.
And I wish I could die,
My wishes are needs;
But all I can do
is sit here and read.

Whee, I love my little on the spot poems, even if they are crap.

--
<3 Kristen
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~mourning-dove Sep 10, 2003, 6:12:39 PM
I lvoe you JEre. I will not hurt you. NOt even with these scissors. Beautiful writing as always. Still won't hurt you though. :hug:

--
"If suicide weren't a sin I'd shoot myself in the eye just to avoid listening to some people." ~ME~

"You don't have to understand a woman. You just have to love her."
~my favorite quote from some old guy on a tv show~

:hug: :hug: :hug: :-) I love you.
:iconvampyrezraven:
~vampyrezraven Sep 10, 2003, 6:44:09 PM
no thanks. i'll call you Jeremy :)

--
tears fall forever from a broken heart



my group:
[link]
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~pyrhho Sep 10, 2003, 6:45:13 PM
wow! amazing poem! not sur about the word choice for "Torture my soul" it seems kinda cliche..

However, amazing rythm, and great job!
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~syphix Sep 10, 2003, 6:55:45 PM
This is an amazing weaving of words here. I like how the rhythm stimulates the overall emotion in this poem. Great work :D

--
Metaphor for a missing moment..
Pull me in to your perfect cirlce
~APC

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